Space ships, evolutionary design, long dead and forgoten planets, the Rave, and humanity, the orphened and last sentient species to be born, might be the key to unlocking the secrets or the Firsts, the ancient creators of all sentients and at last put and end to the mysterious creatures that plaque the galaxy known as the Rave. This setting is a cross between a gothic RPG (exploration of ancient ships, lost planets, and fighting a strange and unknown nemesis) with a futuristic space traveling RPG (space travel, collasal planetary combat, laser guns, and evoluntionary design). Do not be mistaken, this is not a light and happy SciFi RPG setting, it is a dark and mysterious glimpse to both the future and the past
Setting Outline
Content Statistics
| Type | # Created |
|---|---|
| Character | 36 |
| Mechanics | 35 |
| Place | 35 |
| Creature type | 27 |
| Oranization | 22 |
| Event | 6 |
| Object | 4 |
Fenris
Thankyou for you kind review that is so very reflective of this setting. I've talked to her and she told me she didn't know how to alter her previous review after she saw the changes I made and accidently double reviewed. I'd gladly delete the old review and she would to (if she could figure out how). I was going to contact Mike in a minute before you posted that however, so thank you for taking care of it for me.
Edit
I apologize for how aggressive I was in my post, that degree was unwarranted on my part, and I am sorry.
Apologies.
As I said, my original review was no fair judgement of the setting, nor was it intended to be the finalized version of it. I know it was somewhat mean-spirited, but it was also only a placeholder. I can understand that this seemed to be insulting but that was not the intention of the review; the idea was that the double review was removed (I didn't know that only one review per user counts).
If this has hurt any feelings, I apologize, but again this was not my attention.
For future reference
For future reference, even though people can post more than one review, only the highest ones count for each user. So if someone submits two reviews, only one of them counts. Also, please read:
http://byswarm.com/forum/free-all/some-thoughts
I think you've got a good
I think you've got a good start, Zack, but I wanted to give you some feedback before I post a review.
One of the things that I found intriguing from your background was the Guardian concept. What sorts of individuals are the guardians? Are they powerful beings, or are they more like the scouts of the Collective?
Something that I think might make the setting really compelling would be if humanity had been given something in the past by someone from the Collective in order to hide them or protect them to help explain why they had never been found. Were they perhaps a fail safe should the Rave get too powerful and the Collective become too weak? Maybe there's something about humans that keeps them out of the universal consciousness. I'm a big fan of mysteries and conspiracies which is why I make these suggestions. :)
Finally, I would wait a day or two to come back and edit your concept. There are some pieces that I had to reread a few times to understand what you were trying to say. While the writing isn't everything to a good concept, it helps people better understand what you are try to describe.
Thanks, I know it still needs
Thanks, I know it still needs a lot more work though!
I was imagining the Guardians as powerful warships built long ago by the Dacia that while autonomous, still are capable of receiving commands from the Collective (by the way, do you think I should change then name? Re-reading my summary, I keep thinking of the Borg whenever I see it).
Oh, I completely agree, I love conspiracies and mysteries. :) Right now I'm playing with a number of ideas as to what is so uniuqe about humans (you guessed a few of them by the way, so nice job! :), but I haven't come to a decision yet. One that I'm leaning towards right now is that Earth was the last planet the Dacia inhabited before they died out. However, a few survived, and when they saw humans begin to emerge as a sentient life, the began to direct human evolution towards something that would eventually defeat the Rave. Having started humans done the long road towards their destiny, the Dacia used the last of their technology to hide Earth from the rest of the Galaxy until such time as the humans were ready. How's that sound?
Speaking of secrets, I was planning on adding this in at a later revision, but I may as well mention it now to see what you think about it. I was thinking about making one of the great secrets of the galaxy that the Rave were actually created as a weapon by the Dacia! However, the Dacia couldn't turn their weapon off and the Rave slowly went about begining their makers' destruction. Thoughts?
Yeah, that is one of my big problems. I get an idea in my head and my fingers just can't keep up, and it just comes out as a jumbled mess. Thanks for the advice though, I'll come back in a few days and clean it up! :)